Thriller Editing - Random Updates

During making/editing our thriller opening we tried many things out that did not work to try and improve the plot and shots here are a few examples:

To try and make one scene more dramatic we tried having a close-up of Lukman's eyes slide into shot, this however looked extremely cliched and very corny so we decided not to use this. Also the style was too reminiscent of the western cowboy genre.

On one shot the top has been cut off by a low hanging wall and because it is dark it looks like a black block at the top of the screen. As this shot is really nice we tried moving the screen so that it looks like a wide screen shot, however the switching from full screen to wide screen looks extremely stupid and out of place so, we have decided to keep the scene in the film but have kept it with the band at the top. This shot can also symbolize how John's (Tanwyn's character) has his life cut short.

Also as we over ran the time limit by about 20 seconds to shorten the film we tried speeding up the part of Tanwyn walking, to make it a fast motion shot, however with the internal monologue on top and the slow beat of the music it just didn't fit in. Also the pieces in which he is walking are the tension building, mysterious parts as you have no idea where he is going or who he is! To save time we finally decided to cut down each of our shots and dissect some of the dialogue.